stumped by strunk

i guess strunk & white's exhortations on keeping composition simple & concise has made me less competitive in the work force.

while it is good communication to keep ideas concise, it is weak p.r. if you can't accurately describe your accomplishments, or worse, downplay the accomplishments. perpetual case in point: i've been working on this excel worksheet for a couple of days now (if not weeks) and when asked about its progress, i can succintly say it in less than 3 sentences.

the problem is that i often go through extremes. if i begin to explain, dang, i usually end up blabbering my head off. unfortunately, in the corporate world, being too brief would look like you weren't really doing anything at all. couple it with extreme wordiness, you're making bola na (even if you've only expounded a point).

it's especially a problem if you're writing a resume for internal use. for jobhunters/prospective clients, you can pepper your resume with all kinds of bola, as seen from the following examples:

1. coordinated with various project leaders on the development of the project = sent YM to the project leaders on when they'll submit so-and-so document.
2. proposed solution that would integrate the financial & materials systems = after hours of coffee with sleepy coworkers, mumbled something off the top of your head. notice it said "proposed," not "implemented" the solution.
3. drafted process flow integrating services & financial systems = drew a dinky flowchart using Visio, based on previous documentation.

i could go on and on. unfortunately, if the resume's for internal use, your boss knows what you've done, so you're pressured to come clean.

this is what i get for being too honest for my own good... he3x! :P